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The Winners
 

 

We are delighted to announce the winners of the 2017 SA Writers College Short Story Competition.
The winning stories were original, heartfelt and beautifully written. Congratulations on a superb effort.

 

 

FIRST PLACE: ‘Frankie' - by Heinrich van der Walt

RUNNER-UP: ‘The Teen Factor’ - by Janice Gardener-Atkinson

THIRD PLACE: 'Dear Jo'burg' - by Neo Sibiya

 

Fourth place is awarded to Carina Maré for ‘King of the Road’, and fifth place goes to ‘Whole Heart’ by Tumelo Ratladi.

 

Read the judges' comments and the top three stories below the results lists.
 


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Highest Honours

 


These stories narrowly missed making the top five. The characters are authentic, plotlines are credible, and the style and grammar are generally excellent.
 

‘Mr Deli’ – by Aluwani Elizabeth Manenzhe
‘Pick Anything’ - by Ashley Fairfoot
‘The Owner of her Heart’ – by Nondumiso Zondi
‘The Wedding Dress Bear’ – by Amber-Jay van Rooyen
‘The Conflicted Girl’ – by Sekutupu Pretty Kubayi
‘The Disappearance of Kathryn Casey’ – by Helena Higgins
‘The World Spins Endlessly’ – by Lauren Fraser
‘The Heart Behind the Lens’ – by Peter Charter
‘These Aren’t Mine’ – by Caitlin O’Connor
‘Sacred Wine, Secret Child’ – by Asifa Zara Essop
‘Remember It All’ – by Jonathan Botha
‘A Letter to Death’ – by Antonetta Elizabetta Dresen
‘Her Story was Pain’ – by Shifaa Singlee
‘Avoiding Loneliness’ – by Malika Kahn
‘Closure’ – by Keshav Maharaj

SAWC 2017 Short Story Writing Competition Highest Honours

 

 

 

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Honours

 


These well-written stories had great plotlines, solid characters, and were enjoyable to read. Well done to these very good writers.
 

‘The Jungle Within’ - by Mike Job
‘Her Story Was Pain’ - by Shifaa Sing-Lee
‘Closure’ - by Keshav Maharaj
‘A Johannesburg Christmas’ - by James H. Ward
‘Deceiving Hearts’ - by Raymond Hattingh
‘The Containment’ - by Angela Kirykowicz
‘Made To Be Nothing’ - by Laura Campbell
‘Friday’ - by Sifiso Mtshali
‘Stranger and I’ – by Tatum Adonis
‘The Initiation’ – by Musa Gift Masombuka
‘Ward 15’ – by Katlego mofokeng
‘Sister Sacramento’ – by Irene Simpson
‘My World as Big as my Scrapbook’ – By S Rawood
‘Insecure’ – by Ijeoma Sharon Adaugo Iroka
‘The Heart of the Beast’ – by Duncan Aird
‘From Love, Do We Live and Die…’ - Waseem Wadia
‘After the War, We Went to Bed’ – by Lwazi Shwala
‘What Happened to my World?’ – by Abdul Aziz Isaacs
‘Witch’ - Barrie Lake
‘Escaping Life’ - Ilze Germishuys
‘A World Scrolled Through’ - Stefan van der Vegte
‘Keke and the Brave Horse’ - Manzendonga Njokweni
‘Just the Two of Us’ – by Therveshree Canniappen
‘Chance Meeting’ – by Sanabelle Ebrahim
‘Slamming Doors’ – by Christine de Vos
‘Both Near and Far’ – by Robert Hugh John
‘The Jack of Hearts’ – by Kris van der Bijl
‘A Fly named Dennis’ – by Dean Ashley Swartz
‘Blouse of Cards’ – by Yivani Chitumwa
‘16 Bars’ – by Maluleka Adolph
‘Now or Never: My Tears for Her’ – by Sbonelo Majola

SAWC 2017 Short Story Writing Competition Honours



 

 

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Honourable Mention


We thoroughly enjoyed these well-told tales.

SAWC 2017 Short Story Writing Competition Honourable Mention

‘Ruby Cons while the Crows Sing’ - by Pebetse Matabane
‘The Music Lesson’ - by Carita Visser
‘Bang Bang!’ – by Amy Adelle
‘A Change of Heart’ – by Barry Ger
‘Memory Box’ - by Rebone Makgato
‘The Trip’ - by Mbanjwa Sanele
‘The Allure of Foreign Trauma’ - by Retshepisitswe Makhatha
‘Dining Hall’ – by Ayanda Gamedze
‘Pablo and the Mount Nelson’ - by Jody Sampson
‘Uncle Joe’s Café’ - by Shameelah Khan
‘The Confessions of a Domestic Worker’ - by
Darrel Hofland
‘Significant Little Lies’ - by Carey Saaiman
‘I Have Lived, From Childhood To Adulthood To Childhood’ - by Thabo Pitja
‘Marshmallow Malady’ - by Anthony Louis Von Zeil
‘Why Lectures and Quotes Don’t Always Mix’ - by Joshua Miller
‘A Person’s World is only as Big as their Heart’ - by Lynette Afonso
‘Brother / Sister’ - by Michael Schapiro
‘A Night Out’ - by Aurèlie Msiza
‘Heart Seed’ - by Dayle Duncan
‘A Person's World is only as Big as their Heart’ - by Derek Reyneke
‘Too Late’ - by M N Guy
‘A Ghost of a Chance’ - by Cherise Pillay
‘Saturday Night’ - by Jarred Cinman
‘The Prophesy’ - by Mari Fouché
‘Too Late’ – by Maxine Guy
‘Die Fokken Jackrussel’ - by Tanios Tony Garzouzie
‘Agatha’s Cats’ - by Carol Watts
‘A New Empire’ - by Lukhanyo Sikwebu

      More Stories We Loved

 
Great writing is about attention to detail, and pushing the boundaries with words, characters and structure. Next year we'd like to see these authors climbing up the results ladder.
 

‘Seeing the World through New Eyes’ – by Chantell Hayward-Zeelie
‘Re-birth’ – by Peter Hood
‘A Child I Wished Away’ - By Phumla Mali
‘The Honeybee Loses Her Wings’ - By Wynand Conradie
‘In The Life of a Counselor’ - By Catharine Smale
‘Pepsi, Pie and Swimming Pools In-The-Sky’ – by Cynthia Kistasamy
‘Power of Love’ - by Sekhaolelo Tiego
‘Finding Purpose’ - by Jennifer Dempster
‘Broken’ - by Jeanine Beukes
‘Soul Rings’ – by Kate Titmus
‘A Person's World is only Big as their Heart’ - by Khanya Mgwebi
‘Three Sisters’ – by Richard Hasler
‘Haven’s Dream’ – by Sibongokuhle Kubheka
‘Hope For All: Aura’s Story’ – by Wendy Frick
‘The Lucky Cat’ - by Liezl Phillips
‘Cracked Mirror’ - by Lezaan Visagie
‘A Person’s World is only as Big as their Heart’ - by Melaney Peters
‘The Trembling Life’ - by Melania Charmaine Dzwowa
‘Chocolate Tasting’ – by Lazola Pambo
‘Ititihoya’ – by Sue Fairfoot



 

More Writers with Potential

 
These stories also stood out; all potential winners in the making!

‘The Monster’ – by Yandisa Nosasa
‘My Gift’ – by Zita Ripepi
‘Incarcerated Stranger’ - by Chalene Daniels
‘R.E.D.’- by Zamambo V. Mkhize
‘The Notebook’ – by Graham Austin
‘Celestial Encounters: Destined To Be Together’ – by Lebogang K Tlou
‘#Racism Must Fall’ - by Lerato Mokati
‘My Heart, My World!’ – by Ajibulu Adebowale
‘An I For An I’ – by Michael Matthews
‘The Boogey-Man & the Girl in the Red Ranger’ – by Jennifer Ann Grinwis
‘Tension Chez Tiffanie’ - by Kira Mungai
‘And All Things Fell Apart’ – by Nemavunde Dzhavhelo Mulalo
‘One Second’ – by Yusuf Jaffer
‘Yesterday in Tomorrowland’ – by Vuyelwa Happiness Mtolo
‘The Other Side of Life’ – by Yolandie Nieuwoudt
‘How I Took My Heart Back’ – by Simoné Pheko
‘I See the World through the Hole in My Heart’ – by Darrionn Drew
‘Jon Doe: a Crime Story’ - by Jc Zondi
‘Heart of Home’ – by Michelle Diedericks
‘Urine and Fresh Meat’ – by Jarred Thompson

Keep up the great writing! We look forward to hearing from you again next year for our SA Writers College competition closing 30 April 2018.


The judges’ ratings and comments for the top three stories
 

A huge thank you to our judges this year: Ginny Swart, Alexandra Smith, Andrew Salomon, Karen Jeynes , Fiona Ingram and Maya Fowler.

 


First Place


 

'Frankie'

by Heinrich van der Walt


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SAWC 2017 Short Story Writing Competition Winner
Readability: Does it hold your attention? 23/30
Originality 24/30
Flow (Does the reader move smoothly through the story from point to point?) 24/30
Characterization 27/30
Imagery and use of language 25/30
Overall gut response to story 24/30

TOTAL 147/180

 

Judges’ comments
 
  • The school years describing the bullying and general misery of Frankie's life were really good but I just feel the so-happy and forgiving ending is a bit too contrived. Ginny
  • An intriguing story of reversals of fortune with a clever twist in the end but it feels heavy on backstory. In fact, the whole story unfolds like backstory and there is very little in-the-moment dialogue to lift it out of a sense of passive telling. One of the lines of dialogue even seems hyperbolic – 'by far the luckiest patient I have ever treated'. Alex
  • The reader feels genuine empathy for the young Frankie, but the ending feels a bit too neat and planned. Andrew
  • This managed what the true hallmark of a classic short story is: a twist in the tale. It achieved it seamlessly, and it added meaning to what had gone before, so much so that as a reader I wanted to reread this immediately, which is always a good sign! Karen
  • This is the best story in my opinion. Well written, with attention to grammar and spelling, wonderful evocative descriptions, a sense of sorrow, history, decay and despair. There is depth and emotion that will move the reader, perhaps stir up their own memories. The irony is both powerful and poignant. I would be interested in reading more from this author. Fiona
  • This story is well crafted and held my attention from the start. It seemed to me a clear winner, but the ending is a let-down. Effective endings remain a challenge with short stories, and this is the case with "Frankie". Very good use of language and imagery. Maya
 
 


Runner Up


 

 

'The Teen Factor'

by Janice Gardener-Atkinson


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SAWC 2017 Short Story Writing Competition Runner up
Readability: Does it hold your attention? 24.5/30
Originality 23.5/30
Flow (Does the reader move smoothly through the story from point to point?) 24/30
Characterization 24.5/30
Imagery and use of language 24.5/30
Overall gut response to story 23.5/30

TOTAL 144.5/180

 

Judges’ comments
 
  • Love the light, chatty style, the imagery used to describe the chaotic teenage situation and the whole feel of this was just right. Ginny
  • This puts the reader beautifully into the shoes of this step-mother who manages her horror of the teenager in her midst with great compassion and who in the end is rewarded with a modicum of affection. In some ways, the fact that the father of the teen is dead, makes the story somewhat melodramatic and perhaps detracts from the deftly created dynamics of parenting a modern, middle class teenager. Alex
  • A sympathetic glimpse into the interior world of a stepmother trying to cope with overwhelming challenges. At times the dialogue feels affected and there are some issues with tenses. Andrew
  • This is a highly readable story, with a real heart to it. There's a lovely warmth and gentleness to the way the story unfolds, it feels familiar, but also full of hope and optimism. Karen
  • The author's style and sense of dry humour lifted this story from a potentially mundane 'terrible teen' tale to something quite different. The slight exaggeration when talking about unleashing a virus on the neighbourhood and similar imagery is very amusing and adults will appreciate this humour. What surprised me was the revelation of a step-mother's feelings. This was well done. Fiona
  • Great story, but again, the ending could do with work. Endings really do prove to be the greatest challenge of the short story! In this case the solution is easy – pretty much just cutting the last paragraph and tweaking the preceding one.  A warm, entertaining and highly readable style. Maya
 
 


Third Place


 

 

'Dear Jo'burg'

by Neo Sibiya

 


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SAWC 2017 Short Story Writing Competition 3rd Place
Readability: Does it hold your attention? 25/30
 
Originality 24/30
Flow (Does the reader move smoothly through the story from point to point?) 24.5/30
Characterization 23.5/30
Imagery and use of language 23/30
Overall gut response to story 23.5/30

TOTAL 143.5/180

 

Judges’ comments
 
  • Great scene in the cop shop and the level of frustration she feels. Sounded par for the course in most police stations and the ending was great. Ginny
  • How disturbing that this bizarre series of events is absolutely believable and typical of the author's 'city of violent verbs'. Very real and compelling, told with flair and honest emotion. Alex
  • The story maintains a highly effective balance between the protagonist's fear and shock, and the terrifying ludicrousness of her treatment as a victim of crime. Excellent use of dialogue that rings true and moves the story forward. Andrew
  • Your language is very evocative, and this story is very familiar in many ways to all South Africans. To tell it the way you've chosen to with a distance and with poetry is a very interesting choice. I feel though at some point the full weight of emotions should have been felt. Karen
  • This is a story that is all too familiar to anyone living in Joburg and the author has captured the main character's  fear, the intensity of the situation, the brazenness of the muggers, the apathy of the police, all the things newspapers report on a daily basis, so well in perfect detail. I enjoyed the unique approach the author has of writing to the city as a character. Fiona
  • The protagonist's matter-of-fact style in reporting her trauma is striking, and telling of a city where mugging and worse is the order of the day. The story is both a lament and a love song to Joburg, and the set-up is effective. Maya
 
 

 



 
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