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Cut Empty Calories To Get Your Writing Fighting Fit - By Audrey Owen

Logicians may reason about abstractions. But the great mass of men must have images.
—Thomas Babington Macaulay

Get lean and mean by getting rid of empty calories. In writing, empty calories come in the form of filler words, abstractions, redundancies, and oxymorons.

1 Eliminate meaningless phrases.

In speech, little conversational superfluities lighten the linguistic load for our listeners by filling time with material a listener can discount quickly, leaving the mind free to focus on meaty matters.

In written text, these fillers require too much attention and cost money to put on the page.

Every editor has a hit list of these useless phrases. Here is mine:

along the lines of

alongside of

as far a

as of yet

as per

at the present time

at the time that

at this point in time

by means of

by reason of

center around

close proximity

commercial business

due to the fact that

each and every

end result

eventuality

exact estimates

final conclusion

for the purpose of

for the reason that

free gift

future forecast

hushed silence

in actual fact

in order to

in terms of

in the event that

in the neighborhood of

on the basis of

past history

pursuant to the mandate of

sin accordance with

sufficient enough

the area of (except mathematical meaning

the fact is

the fact that

tin the affirmative/negative

to a large extent

unbiased opinion

unexpected surprise

with a view to

with respect to


2 Make abstractions concrete.

Concrete nouns name things we access through our senses. Cinnamon, pen, and chime are concrete nouns. Concrete nouns create a clear picture for the reader.

Abstract nouns are those that make no clear image in the mind. They are nouns that refer to qualities, states, or actions. Bravery, happiness, and punishment are abstract nouns.

The farther you move from the concrete in your writing, the more uncertain your communication.

Sometimes you must use abstract terms. The more academic your writing, the more likely you are to use abstractions. After all, sorting out meanings is the whole point of higher education. When you must use abstractions that your audience may find unfamiliar, make the terms understandable by giving concrete examples.

For example, if you must write about disability, which is an abstract term, define what you mean in concrete terms.
Original sentence: People with a disability will have access issues.

Rewritten sentence: People who use wheelchairs or walkers cannot reach the second floor.

Give more power to your writing by using concrete images and metaphors that stick in the mind.
The next time you think of physical fitness or a good diet (abstract), I’m hoping you’ll think of the text you are writing (concrete).

3 Eliminate redundancies.

Anything unnecessary could be said to be redundant. Here, I am referring to the tendency for some writers to say things more than once. Repeating yourself without giving new information rates somewhere between being mildly annoying to being infuriating. Trust your reader to hear you the first time.

I see the lack of trust more often in fiction than in nonfiction. In fiction, the amateur writer often tells and then shows.
John was sad. He hung his head and cried. He walked with a slouch.
Or the writer shows and then tells.

John hung his head and cried. He walked with a slouch. He was sad.

Can you see the sentence that adds nothing, the one that annoys the reader? Eliminate all such redundancies in your writing.

4 Eliminate oxymorons.

An oxymoron is a contradiction in terms. Used intentionally, especially in poetry, an oxymoron forces new understanding. The ones you want to eliminate are the thoughtless empty-calorie oxymorons. Cut expressions like the following.

· Pretty ugly

· Alone together

· Clearly misunderstood

· Intense apathy

· Old news

· Usually always

Train yourself to be alert to these, and you will begin to spot them easily.

Cutting the empty calories from your writing reduces the load for the reader. Your text will be fit in no time.

©2008 Audrey Owen Used by permission

The article above is Chapter 3 from Audrey Owen's book on self-editing. Get Your Writing Fighting Fit gives the writer a system for combing through a text, hunting down and fixing the most common errors.

Read more at Audrey's website, http://www.writershelper.com/gywffsales.html

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